All this time i've done as i was told
Oh how can you not see i've lived by your rules
But for this moment let the rule be mine
I've wasted enough time just hanging on
But now i want to fly
All this time i've lived according to what you thought was practical
Oh how can you not see
How this practicality is practically choking me
But for this moment i want to breathe
If only for a moment let insanity be my oxygen
I've wasted enough time just hanging on
But now i want to fly
All this time you've trained me to ace this rat race
Oh how can you not see i had dreams to chase
Steady but restrained is the story of my life
But for this moment i refuse to walk the line
I've wasted enough time just hanging on
But now i want to fly
All this time you made me worship stability as the highest virtue
Oh how can you not see i am stuck not stable
For this moment let me risk it all
If only for a moment set me free
Oh how can you not see
I've wasted enough time just hanging on
But now i want to fly
I've wasted enough time just hanging on
But now i want to fly.
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why u think it was just "hanging on" its the think that makes you realze that u were hanging on and from now u know its ur sky welcoming u with silverlining around the cloud to fly with ur pace ur attitude so don't be afraid to let other show ur true colour
A harmonious coexistence of logic and emotion, value and indulgence....that's what i liked about this one..
good work..
to pradeep
are u sure u read the same poem..or is this an auto generated comment.
well whatever it is thanks for liking it..making u like a post has been a tough job.
perhaps what i have percieved is different from what u wanted me to but what the heck!! i liked it, my way or yours...
one word to all those preceeding...
INTENSE
it is qute interesting the way you have expressed yourself, the impulse is there but the only thing that still remains to be seen is whether you act on them and if you do? how far?
this is something where even i can epmathize with you, (please am not looking to share your glory but merely stating having experienced something of similar nature). but then again i'm not as strong willed as you are and i continue to confirm, i'm stable or as you might say stuck.
just as in "matrix" morpheus asks neo to "believe", perhaps even you have started to "believe". so all i can say is make that jump.
fly.
Wow! That was fantastic! Never knew u wrote so well!
Well i agree that pursuing dreams and taking risks is important, and quite romantic too. But pragmatism suggests caution and thorough research behind every decision made.
However, I would also like to add- the irony is that no matter how hard u try, u can't work out all the details in advance... So after a certain point, you have to chuck logic and take a blind risk!!!
to partha
well thanks for liking the poem.
but matrix was the last thing in my mind when i wrote the poem.
no matter how much i desire to learn combat art, music, dance, theatre etc etc. the fact is i have to spend 10 hrs each day 5 days a week in evs..welcome to the real world.
poem was about a moment of madness, a moment of freedom and that is all that it was.
to rohit
thanks for liking the poem and a bigger thanks for leaving a comment.
but i have a slight grievance.
in the entire poem i talk about a moment of free insanity, only to receive a comment filled with logic.
how hopelessly programmed we are..sigh.
first of all sorry for being late i mean im always one post late wid my comments(dats d way i function)so very sorry for dat...as per your suggestion i went thro ur poem once again and after reading it seriously dis time i actually felt that ur previous post(to change or just be) and this poem are totally contradicting wid each other.....in last post u emphasised dat u have always been the way u r...acting crude..being impractical and churlish...never in accordance with standard norms and u also stated dat u r trying hard to improve ur situation against ur will......But in this poem u seemed to be brooding about the fact that how u have not been able to chase ur dreams bcos of being practical and by pertaining to be an ideal one....in last post u told that poise is one quality u have not been able to attain and here u r telling us that u have always worship stability as an highest virtue...its quiet absurd........last time u were talking about leading natural self and working towards ideal self but here in this poem u r talking about leading ideal self dying to live ur natural self.....so one of this situation of yours is an hypothetical one indeed based on the work of sheer contemplation or either u r hanging some where between natural or ideal self while attempting to know which way u want to be.....
to anonymous
If u r reading this reply after clicking on the comments hyperlink, i'll suggest u now scroll up and click on the title of the post 'A Flight..' for better viewing as the reply is a bit longish.
Hey i hadnt checked the comment section of this poem for sometime now simply because i was not expecting any comments here now that a new post is up..hence the delay in reply..n u dont need to be sorry for the late comment as its not an obligation on u to comment..that is something u do willfully and i m thankful to u for showing such interest in my blog.
Now i'll take up the questions that u've raised in ur comment. But before i begin i'd say i'm a tad disappointed with some portions of ur comment. Let me point out which portions exactly
"always been the way u r..acting crude..being impractical and churlish...never in accordance with standard norms and u also stated dat u r trying hard to improve ur situation against ur will."
I guess apart from the crude part i never said any of all that u seemed to have assumed. But anyways i dont want to restart the discussion on the last post as u urself pointed out in a previous comment of urs that it is now "done to death". Howerver this comment of urs seems to suggest that it died in vain..sigh.
Now about this poem..this was a simple poem which i thought (rightly or wrongly) will touch the reader in some measure, as there r always occasions when we feel somewhat caged and just wish to be free of all that the world wants us to be. There is no logic to this nor is it practically feasible and this is precisely why the idea is so romantic.
The comments however to this poem, not only urs but some of the previous ones too were all about rationalising the message of the poem..which i think in some ways is like applying logic to a joke..u can do it alright but then u won't be able to laugh on it. I dont blame the readers for this either, because i think the fact that all of u know me(altough i dont know all of u) makes it almost imperative for u to deconstruct my psyche on the basis of what i write..but like in the case of jokes u can do it alright but then u wont be able to enjoy the poem (that is assuming that the poem had some enjoyment quotient to begin with).
Another thing that i wud like to point out here is that though i write most of my poems in first person but it doesnt mean that the poem is about me only..the feelings in the poem r atleast intended to touch a much broader audience whether it succeds in doing that or not is another matter. Also my poems depend a lot on the mood that i am in while writing the poem..or rather i shud say that my poems r a consequence of the mood that i am in while writing the poem..hence the contradiction that u've mentioned in ur comment is not really a contradiction but more of a contrast. Now if i am happy one moment and sad the other, u wont say that i am contradicting myself, wud u. These r only contrasting emotions and i am capable of experiencing both and same is the case with my posts.
And i guess there is a difference in what u've understood and what i wanted to express in the line 'stability as the highest virtue'..what i wanted say here was that all our lives we r chasing very set material goals that help us settle down. Things like money, marriage,children etc then we get so possesive about all this that even the thought of losing any of it is nightmarish..we r not ready at any cost to risk any of it hence 'stuck not stable'..again the idea is not practical but romantic.
And i'll request u not to search for reason in this poem or the next one for the simple reason that they r unreasonable by design that is their USP. When u see a spiderman or a superman u dont say -
Hey, what happened to gravity.
Read these poems with a similar perspective n then they'll probably sound alright.
Now i may not have replied ur comment line by line but i have tried to make my intention behind the poem clearer while incorporating broadly the main points raised in ur comment..and let me clarify from beforehand itself that while i have not written a very sweet reply but the intention is strictly non-offensive..so while i may have disagreed with some ur points or ur understanding of my points all of it is while complete respect for ur viewpoint. I seriously hope that u'll appreciate this fact and i also hope that i managed to reply satisfactorily. Let me know if i am right in hoping so.
At the time of posting my last comment i was so strong headed about my view but u have been able to convince me wid ur point to an very large extent...nevertheless i do have some real gud points in mind to argue but really dont want to do dat bcoz im very much concur wid u dat one shd not try to find reason behind every emotion and every word....and far as adjectives i used for u in last comment are concerned i used dem just to get best ans from u but not to humiliate u at all!!
And i must say dat u have used the word stability in so broad sense..money, marriage,children(oh ghosh!!)u wud have said mobile,girlfriend,siblings(more contemprory n easy to relate).and you hv used word romantic quite few times but u never talk abt any romantic angle of ur life anywhere...is it some thing so personel or sacroscant??
As far as knowing is concerned i hardly know anything about u except few obvious things like ur name and stuff like dat nor do m having any faint idea abt ur mind set moreover im not even sure whether u ackowledge my existence on earth or not and the same was the case wid me prior to i came up with this thing...that means we know each other exactly equal(or almost nothing)but im sure dat u knw my name very well...
to anonymous
well the sense in which the poem is romantic is very different from the romantic that u r refering to. i dont write about this aspect simply because it doesnt exist.
no i percieve the word romantic in exactly same sense in which u used it,that was just the humor of the situation....so did u induced anything from information in my last comment??
to anonymous
now that u r tellin me that u r not even sure if i know u or not then how am i supposed to deduce anything..hence still clueless.
i think i put it in a wrong way,i mean you know me for sure but to an very limited extent....i can make u guess my name within less then two seconds but i wont do it so easily....THINK...its not that cryptic...its just that u have to think little out of the box....
to anonymous
outside the box or inside it i have no idea at all.
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